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My new, fledgling idea

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What is this poking through the tangled vines of your imagination?:
   Seems to be a story following a young Russian orphan. Thanks Mrs. Medlin and
your vocab tests.


Do you have any idea whatsoever about the storyline?:
   ^^' ...no... As of yet all I know is that it's going to be yet another coming of age story. Because we need more of those polluting our shelves.


Girl or boy protag?:
   Girl. COULD change, but I doubt it.


How did her parents die, then? Surely you know that much:
   And if I don't? I ain't scared, come at me.
   If you must know, I haven't quite decided on the death of the parents. I'll explore the plot a bit more and see what there is to see. On a side note, though: I figure the story in general should have a fantastical element to it to better capture the
minds of the readers, while still keeping in mind that quote that talked about
writing the thing that I would want to read, not necessarily just what
is in style. Thus the puzzle is presented. Challenge fluffin accepted.

Edit: Her parents abandoned her. That's what happened. It was because something made the protagonist different in an alarming way to the denizens around her childhood
home. Her parents were wealthy aristocrats and couldn't stand the shame of
having such an abnormal daughter, so one night, when she was seven, her father took her to a far-off village orphanage and then made a run for it.
   He was more pressured into it by the citizens of
surrounding towns than anything, and her mother had to be forcibly sedated by a
force hired by the father. So basically the father was made of weak stuff.
   During the first seven months after her daughter's abandonment, the mother slowly decayed in her lavish mansion. Her husband forbade her go outside (not that she had much
desire to anyway) and in the latter two years or so of his wife's mental
decline had to hire help to bathe, clothe, and feed her. One of the nurses even
cared enough to read to her to try and bring the wife out of her stupor. At the curtail of the seven month time period the wife took her own life in a way not decided yet. It was partly due to heartbreak from the loss of her first and only child, partly due to the deep sense of violation and betrayal towards her husband who had her sedated against her will, and partly out of recognition of her progression into catatonia for what it
was.

Edit: I'm thinking about giving one of her parents a mysterious past. Maybe her father wasn't pressured into anything, he just wanted to get rid of the child that was
created by a rebel force to be his and the Evil-People-To-Be-Named-Later's undoing--a force that her mother pledged her lifeand was fiercely dedicated to; whose purpose she volunteered her body for: conceiving and carrying a child designed to destroy the dominating EPTBNL she hated so intensely. She of course had no idea that her husband was a part of said EPTBNL, and vice versa. (Or, or, or, maybe he did know and marrying
her was a mission set by the EPTBL. Ooooorrr, maybe it was a Romeo and Juliet type of thing, where their love transcended the bounds of their liege lords and the husband, fearing for his wife's safety, was forced to dispose of the child. Siiiiigh....so many
possibilities.... In whichever case her suicide is made all the more tragic for
it.) But, regardless of the father's allegiances, I do want the mother a part
of whatever rebellion force is going on at the moment.


*grumbles* Most impressive... Well. I don't have very high expectations for this,
but how is the protag-characterization coming?:

   Actually, I do have a pretty good idea thankyouverymuch. I don't
want to be one of those writers who base their characters off of themselves all
the time, but I do want to put some of my worst traits into her. These would be
stubbornness, a tendency to obsess, self-presumption, and sometimes seeming a
little distant from her fellow humans. When we join her story for the first
time she's seven and in the process of being abandoned; and then we'll jump
forward eight years when she's fifteen, awkward, and confused about her
situation and who she is.
   Her Something Different is only worsening her alienation from the children she's grown up with. They're horrid, cruel creatures these children; the change in their
behavior was brought on by the growing up process (because to teenagers--especially hurt, insecure teenagers--appearances matter to the nth degree) and, of course, by the trickle of village tales and rumors into unsuspecting ears that people with this trademark deformity are cursed and dangerous. Ugh, what that deformity is I have yet to decide.
   Oh, and a name. A name would be important, too. TBA.
   Now, on to the issue many consider most important: appearance. Of course, the deformity will be side-stepped for now. Well, one factor that seems to be set in stone, if
only because of her raising and location, is that she's going to be under weight. When we rejoin her at 15, I want her to have an air of malnourishment and misuse (same with the other children) about her, so her hair will be dark brown (think Anna Valerious) thin and lanky, her face a little bit on the narrow with disproportionally highe-ish cheek bones, and all knees and elbows. She also--like most of the other orphan girls--has underdeveloped breasts. Remember, all of this is derived from insufficient food at dat ohphanage.

Edit: Just decided that part of her deformity will include eyes that are pomegranate shell color. Or, they are starting at the irises; they're ringed with a plum sort of color at the edges that kind of permeates inward and blends with the
pomegranate color a little bit....know what I mean?
   I'm thinking about putting a ruby-looking gem in the middle of her forehead as another part of it. Oh gosh, then she would look like Raven from Teen Titans. To be pondered later.
****DISCLAIMER****** READ AT OWN PERIL. MY MIND GETS A LITTLE....HECTIC AT TIMES.

I'm going to go ahead and claim the ideas discussed in here as MY OWN for those jerks who feel the needs to rip off stories. No touchie.

The working title on this is Precipice, simply because that was one of the words on Mrs. Medlin's vocab list. We had to take these ten words and make a short story with them for our quiz last Thursday:

-Replete-adj.-filled to capacity, abundantly supplied.
-Portent-n.-an omen
-Calamity-n.-serious event causing distress or misfortune.
-Despotic-adj.-ruling oppressively and absolutely.
-Benign-adj.-not causing harm, of gentle disposition.
-Foliage-n.-cluster of leaves.
-Austerity-n.-sterness, moral severity.
-Obviate-v.-to make unnecessary, to prevent as a result of anticipating.
-Precipice-n.-very steep cliff or massof rock, on the brink of something dangerous.
-Derisively-adv.-ridiculing mocking.

It's basically a dialog with myself concerning the unearthing of the story.


And don't worry, after I get my splint off, I'll be posting drawings of what she looks like--though besides her Something Different, I'm not too concerned with what she loos like. I won't be describing her much at all in the actual story.
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